While the overall application so far was good (and the sample was outstanding), we would like to request an extended personality sample. You seem to have covered all of Anri's major points; but we would like some more insight into these traits, as well as some further elaboration. What are her hopes and dreams; does she have any other facets or quirks to her personality? How does she react and behave around others? What are some of her flaws; and what are her thoughts about herself?

If you respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 03/07.