While the overall application so far was good, we would like to request an extended personality sample. We would like a little more insight into Ryoko's character and her personality points. For example, how her sole purpose is to watch Haruhi Suzumiya and how she pushed Kyon to try and talk to Haruhi to make her easier to observe— which came across as being concerned about Haruhi distancing herself from the rest of the class. Other points to expand on would include how her cheerful personality never falters and the reasons/implications behind that— including that she does not understand the heavy concept of death.

If you respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 08/06.