While the overall application so far was good, we would like to request a revised personality section along with a new sample. Specifically-- how does he use his intelligence and how does his thought process operate? Tell us more about him. Don't just say how he is--give examples of how he reacts in situations.

It is difficult to get a grasp of his voice and inner workings from the current sample--we would like a new one more focused on his thought process to get a better idea of how you intend to play him.

If you respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 08/29.