While the rest of the application is good, we would like to see a revised personality section. Your current personality section reads more like a history than a personality; it tells us what shaped him into the person he is today, but not much about what kind of person he is.
If you'll respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP. You have until 7/6. Thank you!
By the time he arrives in Vatheon, Ganondorf will have lost much of his drive, what with everything he’s worked for having been snatched away from him at the last second, getting stabbed in the face, and turning to stone. He’s a brilliant fellow, fantastic at planning and strategy, and rather good at adjusting his plans on the fly to get what he wants in the end (save for in the face of certain spanners in the works). He is not as given to bouts of fury as he was when he was younger, though his temper is far from gone. When he does get angry enough, he tends to limit that anger to the one who incited his fury in the first place as he’s found taking it out on others really doesn’t help. Interestingly, he does have a code of honor that he’s adhered to throughout the ages, short as it is: females are not to be killed, and unarmed combatants are to be given a chance to rearm themselves. At this first moment though? He’s mostly a tired, lonely old man who has lost his taste for death.
For the most part he finds his minions hopelessly dumb and cares little for their safety. What should he care for monsters that fail miserably to keep an unarmed child from sneaking into his fortress? For most of them he expects so little of them anymore that he hardly becomes more than annoyed at their failures. For minions he does expect more of, especially those he created himself, he gets quite irate when they fail, though yelling would do little good in those cases as death is generally the condition for failure. Otherwise, he pays little attention to what they might do when not fulfilling whatever task he has assigned them.
...Also, I noticed that I neglected to put in that while he can turn into his alternate beast form, that power will be stripped from him in Vatheon.
Congratulations! Your application has been accepted into Vatheon.
Now that you're in the game, please follow the next few house-keeping steps. ☆ Comment here: #-H, I-Q or R-Z on the Taken Characters post. ☆ Join vatheon, caughtinanetwork, vatheonooc, batheon and our dressing room starfishbucks with your character journal. Participation in Starfishbucks is not mandatory, but if you help a potential applicant voice-test, it would be much appreciated all around. ☆ Add your information here at the Player Contact page. ☆ Reread the rules and premise for a refresher. ☆ A list of permissions posts for the characters of the game can be found here. Please take a look at the posts there, and if you need a permissions post for your character, don’t forget to post a link there! ☆ Introduce yourself over at vatheonooc ☆ Game chat is on AIM, group name vatheon. Information about it can be found on the game's ooc community. ☆ While not required, it is highly suggested that you set up a Voicemail entry for your character. Be sure to use the ‘date out of order’ option!
If you have any further questions or comments, please head over to the f.a.q. Congratulations again, and we hope you enjoy the swim!
![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
Wavering
If you'll respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP. You have until 7/6. Thank you!
Here's the revised section
For the most part he finds his minions hopelessly dumb and cares little for their safety. What should he care for monsters that fail miserably to keep an unarmed child from sneaking into his fortress? For most of them he expects so little of them anymore that he hardly becomes more than annoyed at their failures. For minions he does expect more of, especially those he created himself, he gets quite irate when they fail, though yelling would do little good in those cases as death is generally the condition for failure. Otherwise, he pays little attention to what they might do when not fulfilling whatever task he has assigned them.
...Also, I noticed that I neglected to put in that while he can turn into his alternate beast form, that power will be stripped from him in Vatheon.
Thank you for your consideration!
ACCEPTED
Now that you're in the game, please follow the next few house-keeping steps.
☆ Comment here: #-H, I-Q or R-Z on the Taken Characters post.
☆ Join
☆ Add your information here at the Player Contact page.
☆ Reread the rules and premise for a refresher.
☆ A list of permissions posts for the characters of the game can be found here. Please take a look at the posts there, and if you need a permissions post for your character, don’t forget to post a link there!
☆ Introduce yourself over at
☆ Game chat is on AIM, group name vatheon. Information about it can be found on the game's ooc community.
☆ While not required, it is highly suggested that you set up a Voicemail entry for your character. Be sure to use the ‘date out of order’ option!
If you have any further questions or comments, please head over to the f.a.q.
Congratulations again, and we hope you enjoy the swim!