While the overall application is good, we feel like the personality is a little sparse. Edward is a very central character to the show, so we feel there is more you can go into in regards to his goals and dreams, as well as how he interacts with other people.
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[ Personality ] : There are a lot of things you could say about Edward. Many of them aren't particularly flattering. He's brash, stubborn, arrogant, bad-tempered and frequently violent, with an impulsive streak only matched by the depth of his cynicism. Even ignoring his tendency to fly into berserk rages on little to no provocation, his poor social skills make him hard to hold a conversation with; he's unfailingly rude to more or less everyone, and that goes doubly for any kind of authority. He notably breaks the shounen protagonist mould by being genuinely intelligent, but his hot-bloodedness tends to undermine that - although when it doesn't, expect him to be insufferable about it. None of these traits are what defines him, though - in fact, after two years of being stuck in another world and steadily losing hope of seeing anyone he knows again, he's toned a lot of them down.
What hasn't changed is his sense of responsibility. His worldview can be summarised by the Principle of Equivalent Exchange, the basis of all alchemy and a rule Ed takes very seriously even though it isn't always strictly true: nothing can be gained without losing something of equal value, but conversely, anyone who sacrifices something will obtain something of equal value in return. Translated into a way of life, this means never dodging your obligations and earning your own happiness. Moreover, since Equivalent Exchange is meant to be a universal principle, those obligations aren't solely to yourself or the people in your immediate experience - you're never completely extricable from the rest of the world you live in, so you'll always bear some responsibility for it. It took him a while to refine his philosophy to this point, but it's working out for him so far.
His outlook has two notable consequences. The first is his determination. Ed has bottomless reserves of the stuff. If he decides he's going to do something, then come hell or high water he will; if anything goes wrong, it's his mess to clean up, and nobody else's. This approach tends to get him into more trouble than it gets him out of, but that hasn't ever stopped him. The second is his kindness - the guy's a lot nicer than he first seems, and certainly more than he'd like to let on. He'll gripe about it and maybe try to pass it off as something else, but if it's within his ability to help someone out (and often even when it isn't), he'll almost always try. He sympathises especially strongly with outcasts, having lived as one in a couple of different ways. As you might expect, conflict arises when his altruism interferes with his other goals; generally, though, it's the other goals that will slide.
This says more than you might think, because in general, Ed is intensely goal-driven. He'll completely restructure his life around them if necessary (an extreme example would be his joining the state military at the age of twelve just so he could use their resources), and take personal offence when anybody suggests he can't achieve them, even himself.
His top priority has always been Alphonse, his younger brother and sole surviving blood relation. What began as an ordinary older sibling instinct was cemented after the two of them were effectively orphaned by their mother's death, then further ingrained when their failed attempt to bring her back (which was initially Ed's idea) cost Al his body. Compared to that, Ed's own well-being takes a definite back seat, and even his empathy for other people will struggle a little - he proved himself perfectly willing to sacrifice his life for Al's, and almost failed to balk earlier when the price was instead the lives of a crowd of death row inmates. Al was even Ed's main reason for wanting to leave Earth after being trapped there; once he finally ascertained that Al was still alive, he lost most of his interest in returning home.
However, he does have other motivations, and over the years he's become more comfortable with admitting them. His moral sense, deriving from his abovementioned empathy, is a big one. Back when he was a State Alchemist, he quickly gained a reputation as a champion of the people due to his compulsion to right wrongs wherever he saw them. These days, though he no longer has any stature or much in the way of resources, he's resolved to continue doing much the same thing on Earth; at the point he's taken from, he's chasing the inventor of the atomic bomb to make sure nobody uses it for war.
Of course, this kind of lifestyle takes its toll, and Ed does harbour a tendency to brood about it. To be fair, he's lived through a lot, and he's not the most balanced person when it comes to dealing with it. Though he's mellowed out about some things such as his parental issues, he has plenty of others that he's still working through - among them are his difficulty being candid about his emotions, a habit of viewing other people as less than himself despite intellectually knowing better, and a heavy inclination towards guilt. It's these issues, probably more than his lack of social grace, which will complicate any close relationships with him for the foreseeable future.
Still, rough patches aside, he's a pretty heroic character. He just needs to be given a while in order to show it.
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[ Personality ] :
There are a lot of things you could say about Edward. Many of them aren't particularly flattering. He's brash, stubborn, arrogant, bad-tempered and frequently violent, with an impulsive streak only matched by the depth of his cynicism. Even ignoring his tendency to fly into berserk rages on little to no provocation, his poor social skills make him hard to hold a conversation with; he's unfailingly rude to more or less everyone, and that goes doubly for any kind of authority. He notably breaks the shounen protagonist mould by being genuinely intelligent, but his hot-bloodedness tends to undermine that - although when it doesn't, expect him to be insufferable about it. None of these traits are what defines him, though - in fact, after two years of being stuck in another world and steadily losing hope of seeing anyone he knows again, he's toned a lot of them down.
What hasn't changed is his sense of responsibility. His worldview can be summarised by the Principle of Equivalent Exchange, the basis of all alchemy and a rule Ed takes very seriously even though it isn't always strictly true: nothing can be gained without losing something of equal value, but conversely, anyone who sacrifices something will obtain something of equal value in return. Translated into a way of life, this means never dodging your obligations and earning your own happiness. Moreover, since Equivalent Exchange is meant to be a universal principle, those obligations aren't solely to yourself or the people in your immediate experience - you're never completely extricable from the rest of the world you live in, so you'll always bear some responsibility for it. It took him a while to refine his philosophy to this point, but it's working out for him so far.
His outlook has two notable consequences. The first is his determination. Ed has bottomless reserves of the stuff. If he decides he's going to do something, then come hell or high water he will; if anything goes wrong, it's his mess to clean up, and nobody else's. This approach tends to get him into more trouble than it gets him out of, but that hasn't ever stopped him. The second is his kindness - the guy's a lot nicer than he first seems, and certainly more than he'd like to let on. He'll gripe about it and maybe try to pass it off as something else, but if it's within his ability to help someone out (and often even when it isn't), he'll almost always try. He sympathises especially strongly with outcasts, having lived as one in a couple of different ways. As you might expect, conflict arises when his altruism interferes with his other goals; generally, though, it's the other goals that will slide.
This says more than you might think, because in general, Ed is intensely goal-driven. He'll completely restructure his life around them if necessary (an extreme example would be his joining the state military at the age of twelve just so he could use their resources), and take personal offence when anybody suggests he can't achieve them, even himself.
His top priority has always been Alphonse, his younger brother and sole surviving blood relation. What began as an ordinary older sibling instinct was cemented after the two of them were effectively orphaned by their mother's death, then further ingrained when their failed attempt to bring her back (which was initially Ed's idea) cost Al his body. Compared to that, Ed's own well-being takes a definite back seat, and even his empathy for other people will struggle a little - he proved himself perfectly willing to sacrifice his life for Al's, and almost failed to balk earlier when the price was instead the lives of a crowd of death row inmates. Al was even Ed's main reason for wanting to leave Earth after being trapped there; once he finally ascertained that Al was still alive, he lost most of his interest in returning home.
However, he does have other motivations, and over the years he's become more comfortable with admitting them. His moral sense, deriving from his abovementioned empathy, is a big one. Back when he was a State Alchemist, he quickly gained a reputation as a champion of the people due to his compulsion to right wrongs wherever he saw them. These days, though he no longer has any stature or much in the way of resources, he's resolved to continue doing much the same thing on Earth; at the point he's taken from, he's chasing the inventor of the atomic bomb to make sure nobody uses it for war.
Of course, this kind of lifestyle takes its toll, and Ed does harbour a tendency to brood about it. To be fair, he's lived through a lot, and he's not the most balanced person when it comes to dealing with it. Though he's mellowed out about some things such as his parental issues, he has plenty of others that he's still working through - among them are his difficulty being candid about his emotions, a habit of viewing other people as less than himself despite intellectually knowing better, and a heavy inclination towards guilt. It's these issues, probably more than his lack of social grace, which will complicate any close relationships with him for the foreseeable future.
Still, rough patches aside, he's a pretty heroic character. He just needs to be given a while in order to show it.
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