While the overall application is very good, we would like to see an extended personality section. While what you have is perfectly accurate, we would like to know more! Specifically-- how does he feel about friends, does he have any friends, and if so, how does he feel about these friends? What are his thoughts about himself? Elaborate on how he acts toward others. Does he have any personality quirks or anything pertinent to his individual character? Tell us more about him. Don't just say how he is--give examples of how he reacts in situations. This is your chance to make him shine, so we would like to know more about him!
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Here's my revision for Patroklos' personality section. I decided to tack a few things on:
This drastic change in his personality eventually leads into the creation of "α Patroklos" (Alpha Patroklos), which is his more determined and focused alter-ego that is possessed by the will of Soul Calibur. Yet even though it's the will of the spirit sword forcing to behave in this manner, Patroklos eventually realizes that his past self was blinded by hate and goes through great lengths to change that. His demeanor towards others changes drastically. He goes from being overzealous and pretentious to becoming kind and honestly sincere about his goals. While he does have a habit of being a tad arrogant and if not downright insulting during combat, Patroklos definitely seems to grow past his shortcomings to become a person worthy of praise. He's a good guy, that he is. It's just that he has many flaws he needs to work on before he can be respected rather than feared by others. His brash nature and sometimes violent temper makes him less than tolerable for some, but Patroklos tries his best to keep those flaws at bay. He's far from perfect and by now he realizes this most.
The way he treats others varies heavily in the way he treats Pyrrha, his sister. He's so caring, considerate, and loving towards her. Patroklos wants nothing else other than to protect his long lost sister from anyone or anything. She's the only family he has, the only person who's supposed to love him unconditionally. He holds his sister in high reverence, while his respect towards others isn't quite so high. It took much for Z.W.E.I to earn Patroklos respect in the storyline, especially since Patroklos viewed the wolf-man as a threat. The same goes for Siegfried and the other members of Schwarzwind who came to the young warrior's aid. Patroklos was admittedly a bit rough around the edges around the start of his storyline but after a few defeats, Patroklos finally acknowledged ZWEI and the others as his friends and not foes. He then willing accepts their aid as he continues his quest to save Pyrrha. While he's still a little on guard around others, Patroklos can come across as slightly friendly when he isn't having one of his many tantrums.
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Patroklos Alexander | Soul Calibur V | Reserved
Revision
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Revision
This drastic change in his personality eventually leads into the creation of "α Patroklos" (Alpha Patroklos), which is his more determined and focused alter-ego that is possessed by the will of Soul Calibur. Yet even though it's the will of the spirit sword forcing to behave in this manner, Patroklos eventually realizes that his past self was blinded by hate and goes through great lengths to change that. His demeanor towards others changes drastically. He goes from being overzealous and pretentious to becoming kind and honestly sincere about his goals. While he does have a habit of being a tad arrogant and if not downright insulting during combat, Patroklos definitely seems to grow past his shortcomings to become a person worthy of praise. He's a good guy, that he is. It's just that he has many flaws he needs to work on before he can be respected rather than feared by others. His brash nature and sometimes violent temper makes him less than tolerable for some, but Patroklos tries his best to keep those flaws at bay. He's far from perfect and by now he realizes this most.
The way he treats others varies heavily in the way he treats Pyrrha, his sister. He's so caring, considerate, and loving towards her. Patroklos wants nothing else other than to protect his long lost sister from anyone or anything. She's the only family he has, the only person who's supposed to love him unconditionally. He holds his sister in high reverence, while his respect towards others isn't quite so high. It took much for Z.W.E.I to earn Patroklos respect in the storyline, especially since Patroklos viewed the wolf-man as a threat. The same goes for Siegfried and the other members of Schwarzwind who came to the young warrior's aid. Patroklos was admittedly a bit rough around the edges around the start of his storyline but after a few defeats, Patroklos finally acknowledged ZWEI and the others as his friends and not foes. He then willing accepts their aid as he continues his quest to save Pyrrha. While he's still a little on guard around others, Patroklos can come across as slightly friendly when he isn't having one of his many tantrums.
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