While the overall application is good, we would like to see a revised sample. The current sample doesn't give us a very good feel for how you would play Yuugi in Vatheon. We would like to see something that better portrays his voice and how you intend to play him.
If you'll respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 6/3. Thank you!
(Sorry, baby's first app somewhere everyone doesn't know 'em.)
"What the heck is going on here?"
Yuugi hissed as he rose, examining his newly-scuffed hand. As well as a newly tatooed wrist? Holy shit, what was that?! It took about about five minutes of vigorous rubbing to realize the weird symbol on his hand wasn't coming off anytime soon. He'd been certain he had fallen asleep in his room- and that he wasn't drunk when he did. This was getting more and more dreamlike. His first assumption was Atlantis. Maybe something like the memory rpg, but for Dartz. All blue, for one thing. The sky was... not the sky. All right, that was new. Sucking on his scratches, he looked out at the rest of the plaza. Surprisingly, yes, everyone could see him, and no, he wasn't transparent. This became even more obvious when he decided to test his solidness. It hurt, and now everyone was looking at him.
Great.
He'd thought that things like this would stop happening after his other self left, but it looked like he'd never be entirely free of weird adventures. To be honest, though, that was completely fine by him. The priority right now was finding his friends. They had to be around here somewhere, and knowing their luck, they probably needed his help. He could worry about all this other weirdness after he'd found them.
Congratulations! Your application has been accepted into Vatheon.
Now that you're in the game, please follow the next few house-keeping steps. ☆ Comment here: #-H, I-Q or R-Z on the Taken Characters post. ☆ Join vatheon, caughtinanetwork, vatheonooc, batheon and our dressing room starfishbucks with your character journal. Participation in Starfishbucks is not mandatory, but if you help a potential applicant voice-test, it would be much appreciated all around. ☆ Add your information here at the Player Contact page. ☆ Reread the rules and premise for a refresher. ☆ A list of permissions posts for the characters of the game can be found here. Please take a look at the posts there, and if you need a permissions post for your character, don’t forget to post a link there! ☆ Introduce yourself over at vatheonooc ☆ Game chat is on AIM, group name vatheon. Information about it can be found on the game's ooc community. ☆ While not required, it is highly suggested that you set up a Voicemail entry for your character. Be sure to use the ‘date out of order’ option!
If you have any further questions or comments, please head over to the f.a.q. Congratulations again, and we hope you enjoy the swim!
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Revision
If you'll respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 6/3. Thank you!
Re: Revision
"What the heck is going on here?"
Yuugi hissed as he rose, examining his newly-scuffed hand. As well as a newly tatooed wrist? Holy shit, what was that?!
It took about about five minutes of vigorous rubbing to realize the weird symbol on his hand wasn't coming off anytime soon. He'd been certain he had fallen asleep in his room- and that he wasn't drunk when he did. This was getting more and more dreamlike.
His first assumption was Atlantis. Maybe something like the memory rpg, but for Dartz. All blue, for one thing. The sky was... not the sky. All right, that was new. Sucking on his scratches, he looked out at the rest of the plaza. Surprisingly, yes, everyone could see him, and no, he wasn't transparent. This became even more obvious when he decided to test his solidness. It hurt, and now everyone was looking at him.
Great.
He'd thought that things like this would stop happening after his other self left, but it looked like he'd never be entirely free of weird adventures. To be honest, though, that was completely fine by him. The priority right now was finding his friends. They had to be around here somewhere, and knowing their luck, they probably needed his help. He could worry about all this other weirdness after he'd found them.
ACCEPTED
Now that you're in the game, please follow the next few house-keeping steps.
☆ Comment here: #-H, I-Q or R-Z on the Taken Characters post.
☆ Join
☆ Add your information here at the Player Contact page.
☆ Reread the rules and premise for a refresher.
☆ A list of permissions posts for the characters of the game can be found here. Please take a look at the posts there, and if you need a permissions post for your character, don’t forget to post a link there!
☆ Introduce yourself over at
☆ Game chat is on AIM, group name vatheon. Information about it can be found on the game's ooc community.
☆ While not required, it is highly suggested that you set up a Voicemail entry for your character. Be sure to use the ‘date out of order’ option!
If you have any further questions or comments, please head over to the f.a.q.
Congratulations again, and we hope you enjoy the swim!