Before we can accept your app, we'd like to request some revisions. We would like to request an additional sample (either first person, or third person) set in Vatheon. We would also like to see more to the history section. It seems rather vague for this character. While you do hit on all of their character traits, the personality section as a whole is difficult to follow because of the grammar issues. If you respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 8/6.
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Before we can accept your app, we'd like to request some revisions. We would like to request an additional sample (either first person, or third person) set in Vatheon.
We would also like to see more to the history section. It seems rather vague for this character.
While you do hit on all of their character traits, the personality section as a whole is difficult to follow because of the grammar issues.
If you respond to this comment with your revisions, we'll look them over ASAP! You'll have until 8/6.